(a) 9 (Love/Passion) Come, Show Me The Way Poem by Renu Rakheja a.k.a Tranquil Ocean

(a) 9 (Love/Passion) Come, Show Me The Way

Rating: 3.1


Lost in the vortex of my thoughts
Seeking a vision that got lost
Fire consumed or a lost monsoon
Parched earth awaiting a boon
A solitary traveller in an undulating desert
that got lost....

Come show me the way
In your light, everything is clear
And its a sunny day
In your absence, its all dark and queer
All thoughts gone astray

Come show me the way
In your sound, everything is music to the ears
To which I dance and sway
In your absence, cacophony blares
All notes dark and gray

Come show me the way
In your touch, everything is pure
With a bright spark and a ray
In your absence, cannot endure
Even my own skin, t'is like clay

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
unknown 17 May 2018

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Catastrophe King 30 August 2007

My Response: Come, Show Me The Way … I am the mislaid stranger, being whirled in your thoughts; Struggling with a sharp twinge and the face I never lost! I had lot of fire in my mind and some floods of anguish; Burning under the scorching sun, like the desert sands! Yes, I am the lost stranger, struggling and burning this life! How can I show you the route towards your enlightenment? My light is so hazed, it is neither fair nor bright – you realize! My thoughts had swelled up the existence of my forlorn self; I have many blood blisters, those spread in years of distress! Yes, I am the gloom moonless night, have nothing but darkness! I have no lyrics that could sing the praise of a beautiful life. How can I sing for you those melodious notes, I lost in vain? I confess my downer now, as my music only shower shingles; That, my vocals are oppressed and I have lost my channel! Yes, I am a hapless performer and I sing some lament and dirge! How can I choose to show you the path, a lost stranger I am? I have this doomed touch and everything just gets appalling! That I have had lost my ember and light of that life of hopes; I had persisted to exist in your absence, but now I just fail!

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Nalini Hebbar 04 September 2006

throbing pain of lonliness...the waiting...the feeling of nothingness with out the loved one...these are very deep strong emotions well expressed in your poem...love...nalini

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Patricia Gale 04 September 2006

So beautiful, the longing the tones of needing strength. You shine T.O.!

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Preeti - is here! 04 September 2006

This poem has a certain yearning, yet it's rustic and not in your face. Well done as always. My fav lines -Fire consumed or a lost monsoon Parched earth awaiting a boon A solitary traveller in an undulating desert that got lost.... ^^ Sound very Earthy! Preets

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