(a) 30 (Love/Passion) I Dont Want To Close My Eyes Poem by Renu Rakheja a.k.a Tranquil Ocean

(a) 30 (Love/Passion) I Dont Want To Close My Eyes

Rating: 3.3


Today I dont want to close my eyes
My heart tells me that your image is going to fly
From the horizon of my heart to its beyond
I want to capture the image forever in the pond
A sacred reflection into which I can dip
When the sun is too strong and sip
its drops when i want to quench my thirst
When my throat is parched and I want to burst
Into a song.....

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr 22 September 2006

REFRESHING, MELODIOUS PIECE...I LIKE THIS, T.O.>>>YOUR PASSION FOR THE PEN IS ALWAYS EVERSO PRESENT INTHE QUALITY OF YOUR FINISHED PRODUCT''''''''''''''''''''''''''''FJR

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Lynda Robson 22 September 2006

Really lovely, if I close my eyes I can imagine the scene well written Love L xx

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David Darbyshire 22 September 2006

You can sing with your eye's closed? nice, very nice poem Tran dave xxx

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Geoff Warden 22 September 2006

a simp; e yet electrifying piece......I shall sing ten

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Tranquil I love when I can read a poem that makes me wish I wrote it...this is such a beautiful poem and Yes I wish I had penned this piece because it is brilliant... The imagery is amazing and the feelings you shared so freely and easily poured onto the screen and made this reader feel the passion...and based on your other comments I am not the only one who felt the heartbeat and passion of the poem! Beautiful.Simply Beautiful! ! ten out of 10! I added it to my favorites as well. Thanx for sharing TO......................... =Shelley=

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Bobbie Jean Wright 28 November 2006

You have a way of pulling the reader into your emotion. Your imagery is outstanding and your rhyme is original and superb. Another great read. Thank you for sharing.: o) bobbie

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Preeti - is here! 26 September 2006

Even i don't want to close my eyes, how will I read your lovely poems. This one's beautiful, lovely rhymes too. Preets

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Soothing, serene, engaging and powerful through that... and yes... yes. We know that feeling - those of us who are deeply lucky. A captivating write, TO. t x

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Debora Short 22 September 2006

Transcendence suberb! Blessings ~ Debora

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