Treasure Island

hasmukh amathalal

(17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

400th mark


Completion of 400th poem was not great feat or mark
Many new ideas flashed in mind and worked as spark
Raising voice at roof top doesn’t make it worth while
No one will share ideas or walk with you for a mile

Over year and half ago I was virtually nothing
Only vague ideas of verses to translate as something
There was hidden fear that readers may reject
Still presentation of new ideas was only object

Nature was appealing when I went round
Something new was in offing and always found
Bird’s sweet voice and cool breeze were appealing
Mind was set up on it with earnest effort for revealing

It was so difficult to go in for poetic words
Sought the strength and blessings from the lord
World at large seemed so big and enterprising
Nothing could stop me from little writing

“Go to hell” or “never dare to call again”
Funny comments with abusive words main
I detested the weapon with its sharp edge
My be I lacked enough skill or knowledge

Many offered me with their kind comments
Advised to stand fast and not to lament
How can I be ungrateful to their advices?
I had to offer gratitude and only promises

Some one commented I was killing poems
Had no teeth, wisdom and lacked rhythms
I sincerely thanked them to improve upon
To write simple poems and simply carry on

New people, thoughts with old or new readers
They were by no means less than leaders
I was novice and had to act as learners
To gain and part with is the reality for beginners

I have followed simple theme and plot
It may not be up to mark or falling short
I may try to uphold values and ideas defend
Will not stoop so below to alienate or offend

How poetry does impresses up on mind?
What type of lessons or new things we find?
Poetry, I thought is the holiest approach among all
I enjoy its fruit when sit back and recall

Submitted: Monday, January 04, 2010

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  • Georgina Murray (5/23/2014 7:36:00 AM)

    Really inspirational poem about the struggles and rewards of writing. Beautifully concise points made in this insightful piece - well done (Report) Reply

  • Binish Cd (1/4/2012 8:59:00 AM)

    really a great expression of words, , , , , , , , , , nice work friend, , , , , , , , , (Report) Reply

  • Earl Clark (8/29/2010 8:09:00 PM)

    Continue to write my friend - some poems may punish us and some may grace us. It is all good, inspiring and congratulations on 400-500+ poems. I know personally the energy that can go into a poem. Was every dot and titlle in place, we think afterwards- was it worth the while. YES, YES, YES all poetry is worth the while. Perfection is not the key - it is the impression on the reader and the release of energy from the poet, let the jeni out of the bottle, write more. You have a diverse range of ideas, derived I can tell from first hand knowledge. (Report) Reply

  • Romeo Della Valle (8/22/2010 11:32:00 AM)

    Nothing more left for me to say, Excellent! and congratulation in your great accomplishment. Another 400 new poems are awaiting in your brilliant mind. 10+++, Your masterful works give you away, Love and Peace... (Report) Reply

  • surya . (3/30/2010 8:13:00 AM)

    wonderful predicament of an experienced poet on embarking a new one.but the fruit of the labour is well conceived and delivered in the last para.
    'How poetry does impresses up on mind?
    What type of lessons or new things we find?
    Poetry, I thought is the holiest approach among all
    I enjoy its fruit when sit back and recall'

    voted10
    surya (Report) Reply

  • Maria Shipka (2/7/2010 1:29:00 PM)

    ....so this was your '400-th' poem (now I see you already reached 441)
    I cannot believe you only one year ago (or so...) started to write :)
    I admire your effciency of workman, the capacity of thoughts....
    To compare with you I´m a novice and amateur :) (Report) Reply

  • Riyaz Gupta (1/18/2010 8:59:00 PM)

    I was novice and had to act as learners
    To gain and part with is the reality for beginners

    ....you have framed a mind set of each beginner through these words.... (Report) Reply

  • Sahar Sahar (1/16/2010 1:53:00 PM)

    congratulations,
    with some sparkly,
    moonlight,
    filtering from jasmine,
    glowing in your home,
    and keep on with your,
    stories to friends. (Report) Reply

  • Annabel Sheila (1/14/2010 6:19:00 PM)

    Congratulations on your 400th poem.....never let anyone sway you from your passion for writing! ! ! Your thoughts are golden and sharing them with strangers is a beautiful thing to do.

    Anna (Report) Reply

  • Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK (1/14/2010 8:48:00 AM)

    400 can’t be the finish line for a indefatigable thinker like you…with always a stint of humaneness and educative…many more thousands of 400 we’re looking for…forward…thanks Sir
    10+
    Ms. Nivedita
    UK (Report) Reply

  • Ravi Sathasivam (1/14/2010 1:12:00 AM)

    Congratulations to you Hasmukh for reaching your 400th poem.
    I am really proud of you.
    Well done (Report) Reply

  • Dennis Go (1/12/2010 10:05:00 PM)

    Congrats on your 400th poetry post. I can relate well on every verse. You should try and explore free form poetry. (Report) Reply

  • Fay Slimm (1/12/2010 8:34:00 AM)

    Congratulations friend on reaching your 400th - - is gives a satisfied feeling and an urge to continue in the pathway of poetry... it is surely the 'holiest and purest ' of means of expression -. Keep up your writing.10 from Fay (Report) Reply

  • Dr.subhendu Kar (1/11/2010 1:38:00 PM)

    Poetry, I thought is the holiest approach among all
    I enjoy its fruit when sit back and recall........................congrats dear friend by achievement, yes poetry is the holiest and purest feeling yet draining from soul deep within, great write,10+++, thanks for sharing (Report) Reply

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