John Westlake

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133. There Was A Girl With A Broken Heart - Poem by John Westlake

There was a girl with a broken heart
her confidence had been torn apart
so in time she felt she'd lost her soul
and in her life was one big hole

And then one day she met a man
and things with him did not go to plan
she offered her love and life that he might stay
but instead he just turned and walked away

Left her to drown in a sea of her own denial
from then on everything seemed to be a trial
every day she screamed and cried
every night she prayed that she might die

Then one day I found her pleading
on her knees in an alley with her arms bleeding
she'd cut herself on both her wrists
but suddenly her life took a better twist

I helped her up and took her in my arms
promised that I'd keep her safe from harm
said I would help her smile and laugh
and so set her future on a much lighter path

So I took her life and rebuilt it anew
and so in time her confidence grew
she relearned how to love and how to care
knowing that for her I'd always be there

Then one day she found another
who asked her out and became her lover
they married in style the following year
now she has no need to fear

She had a shattered life and broken soul
now her husband's love has filled that hole
when last we met she said she'd never forget me
she'd remember forever the one who set her free

Topic(s) of this poem: friendship

Comments about 133. There Was A Girl With A Broken Heart by John Westlake

  • Rookie - 112 Points Jasmine Black (11/25/2015 6:23:00 PM)

    Magnificent. I thought it was beautiful and it really made me stop and think (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 39 Points Rian Murphy-fairclough (7/23/2015 6:44:00 PM)

    Mr westlake, this is beautiful. Thank you for sharing it. It has actually brought a tear to my eye. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 11,888 Points Savita Tyagi (6/29/2015 7:28:00 AM)

    Lovely poem dealing with highest kind of love. Great rhyming. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,645 Points Jasbir Chatterjee (6/29/2015 4:30:00 AM)

    I like the let-go spirit of the poem... (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 20,460 Points Daniel Brick (1/19/2015 11:56:00 PM)

    I like this poem very much. It descends to the depths in the middle but then ascends to the heights of fulfillment. I admire the character of the Good Samaritan narrator who does not see her as a sexual partner but a fellow human being. It is the wholeness of her life that he is determined to restore. And if I'm reading this correctly, when she finally finds a decent man who loves her, he steps aside. That's agape love. Your poem refreshes the spirit. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,578 Points Darlene Walsh (12/20/2014 9:04:00 PM)

    This is a lovely poem and wonderful love story. I like the rhyming and the flow. And it shows the importance of caring friendship.

    Darla :) (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 544 Points Kelly Shanks (12/5/2014 1:29:00 PM)

    A really good poem, it's good that it has a happy ending. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 247 Points Tanya Marcoux (11/16/2014 9:13:00 PM)

    Thoroughly enjoyed this poem! Thanks! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 4,941 Points Points Of View (9/17/2014 7:34:00 PM)

    I was in the middle part reading I thought you're the one who march w/her thru the altar of marriage..
    Maybe you let go of her... ;) (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 17,070 Points Bri Edwards (8/5/2014 11:31:00 PM)

    ok P, to MyPoemList it goes.. bye bye. OH! it's still here, on this page. how do 'they' do that? ? yes, i see many 'nice' comments already posted. i suppose i had better be nice also. great rhyming, great story, great surprise when the man who saved her was not the man she married (great especially if you made this up!) , great ending to make every woman cry. not me! ! ! thanks for sharing. :) bri

    p.s. am i the first male to comment? chris could be christopher, and any name could be fictitious. (Report) Reply

    Gold Star - 16,633 Points John Westlake (8/6/2014 6:32:00 AM)

    You are the second male to comment. Mr Chris G. Vaillancourt has been gracious enough to comment on one of my poems before.

  • Veteran Poet - 1,470 Points Chris G. Vaillancourt (5/7/2014 10:19:00 AM)

    This is a quite lovely and abstract piece, clever with a twist.
    I liked it all (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Katie Kelley (5/5/2014 8:36:00 AM)

    Love this poem and so happy that it has a good ending! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Hannah Kelly (5/5/2014 7:09:00 AM)

    This is really beautiful. Full of hope! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 30 Points Shian Daley (5/1/2014 4:16:00 PM)

    Wow such a beautiful poem. very inspiring and very lovely I absolutely adore your poetry (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sara Hart (4/21/2014 12:36:00 PM)

    So beautiful & very touching. Honestly, one of the absolute best poems I have ever read. I look forward to reading all of your poems and I wish you Happy Writings! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Haley Session (4/16/2014 6:09:00 PM)

    Love this poem John very deep and love the happy ending (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Renee Sinclair (4/12/2014 4:26:00 PM)

    Wow, i really like this, reminds me of someone i know. What a great person you are to have helped her through that. Thanks for sharing! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Gnossienne (4/11/2014 5:50:00 AM)

    Beautiful poem John, tell me this story is true...! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,375 Points Nika Mcguin (4/3/2014 12:58:00 PM)

    I agree with Noreen, the rhyming here is lovely. On another level though, I'm sure there are so many broken hearted girls out there who wish for this kind of ending. I get the feeling, most of them will get it - I'm being optimistic though.

    ~Nika (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,075 Points Noreen Carden (4/2/2014 7:54:00 AM)

    Very nice poem with nice rhymes and rhythm well done (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, March 31, 2014

Poem Edited: Saturday, December 20, 2014

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