(114) View Of The Sun Poem by Risha Ahmed (12 yrs)

(114) View Of The Sun

Rating: 3.0


Greeted by the rooster's usual crow
I watched the fishermen at sea
As their little boats began to row
The people were in a hustle bustle
Getting ready to go for work
I saw a man with his tie stuck in a fence
I let out a soft smirk
Children are running around their homes
Getting ready for school fast
But on their way they broke things like
Showpieces in their haste
After some time saw
The school kids studying
And taxis and buses
On the road were hurrying
I wished I could play with someone
The clouds were always rude
They always hide the view of Earth
And they always spoil my mood
My friend Moon is very nice
With him I share my light
But I can’t play with him because
He only comes at night
It was afternoon on earth
And the people were making a racket
I was feeling so hot I wished
Tiny Pluto would lend me his cold blanket
Time flew and it was evening
All the kids were back from school
Some were doing homework
While many others were lazing in the pool
Some people were back from work
And preparing food for hungry mouths to feed
And I saw a lone boy in his garden
Planting a mango seed
Before I knew it, night fell
And it was time for me to retrieve
But I wasn’t going empty handed
With many memories I leave
I felt myself being pulled down
On my way I met the moon
I felt drowsy but managed to say
Goodnight, I’ll be seeing you soon.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
David Harris 19 October 2007

Risha, this was an unusal poem to say the least. However your imagination really soared on this one. I like it. Top marks my little princess of poetry. David

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rajagopal haran 29 October 2007

Dear Risha, really brilliant work; keep it up

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Rajaram Ramachandran 29 October 2007

The picture is running like a cinema and the words flow like a river. A fine piece of work by Risha, the sweet little girl.

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Tsira Goge 23 February 2008

Hello Risha...Beautiful poems, you are the clear head the small poetess... All you notice round yourself, even small poor the boy and so on...... I am glad that we have met... Thanks for warm for all comments....

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Vijay Gupta 15 February 2008

fine poem.i like it...............

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Diane Violet 02 November 2007

A day in the life of the view from Risha's sun, lovely poem! ! Hugs, Diane

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Patti Masterman 30 October 2007

Does Risha mean: Sweet little girl yielding a LARGE PEN? I love your moon poem, Risha. It seems like a classic already.

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Charles Garcia 30 October 2007

As Rajaram says the words flow like a river, beautiful write

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Risha Ahmed (12 yrs)

Risha Ahmed (12 yrs)

Cochin(India)
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