010: The Lovers Poem by Colin Johnston
010: The Lovers
<font color=green>They lie side by side,
But apart, not touching,
Separated by inches,
Which may as well be miles.
Each in their own cocoon of thoughts,
Different Galaxies, in the same Universe.
It wasn't always thus,
In the deep recesses of his mind
He could remember Closeness,
Kind words, Loving touches,
Minds and bodies as one,
When their World was young.
They both stirred, one from sleep,
The other in expectation,
Hoping, always hoping,
Before the lamp's harsh light,
Banished the dream.
His mind screams,
But his voice is silent,
Too proud to beg.
Lying on that barren landscape,
He turns away, still separated,
He waits, but no longer hopes.
She is fully awake now
And sensing his longing, she rises
And makes him a nice cup of tea
After all, it is his Birthday
And they always could read each other's mind.
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The scene was so real..so well described..and so common place! it was like watching a movie! well done!
Good dramatic situation, Colin! Lots of good, true detail. Pathos, and conflict, pos and neg feelings, the complexity of being human. And one feels it in the character you let us inside of, his 'mind screams' (did I quote correctly?) And, to attest to the success of the piece,13-now 14-comments! And thank YOU for your recent comments on several of my own efforts! I apologize for this belated acknowledgement. It means a lot to me when someone takes the time to say something about something I've written.
Yes very complex poem. Rather sad to read, but I find it very positive in general
Powerful poem...sad and touching and all too true...seen in all its realness and honesty...with just enough dash of humour to make it bearable. The truth of it hurts and many lovers will recall and recoil from this limbo where couples go when communiction falters and fails. . .and a physcial inch is an emotional mile. love Donall Donall
As age sets in somehow love loses it glamour. I think it might be old age. nice write
This is another outstanding poem, Colin, one that older married couples, especially those with the children grown and gone, can well relate to. It is vividly expressed in just about every line and tells a tale many of us are all too familiar with in our own personal lives. Your poetic talent shines in this impressive poem. Carl.
a very beautiful one..''separated by inches'a very nice work..grace
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/23/2024 2:35:19 AM # 1.0.0.1119
extraordinarily rich in substance..amusing but it really happens sometimes between a couple..hoping and just sleeping over an unfulfilled wish..