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Diana Rosser Female, 56, United Kingdom (10/1/2013 2:47:00 PM)

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I like this, particularly the idea...though the style took some time to get used to....I think that this is because it is neither prose or rhyme, nor does it have a steady metre but I do think if you consider applying some poetic technique, this poem is potentially a really good write and worthwhile read. (I hope you really did want an actual critique) . Diana

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  • Mike Acker (10/1/2013 4:48:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Thank you Diana...I absolutely did want a critique and an honest one too....you are absolutely right in what you said. The poem came to me fairly quickly and late into the night. Wrote it down then worked on it a bit the next day and then did not want too much technique as to spoil the feeling I was trying to express. But you are right in what you said and thank you.....we wont progress with " I liked it very much" type of critiques!

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