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  • Makayla Johnson (9/25/2012 4:23:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Hi, I'd like to know what you all think of my poem " The Artisan Knight" .

    Here I am, the gallant knight,
    trapped in a room where I cannot fight.
    Here I am silent and still,
    gazing out the windowsill.

    I paint the world outside my cell,
    dragons and demons fight as well
    as the battles raging in my head,
    the harrowing feeling that I might be dead.

    I let my brush sweep the skies,
    I build a world full of whys.
    Dizzily, I speckle stars
    and give new life to planet Mars.

    But footsteps break me from my page,
    I pace inside the mental cage,
    my mind is melting with my brush,
    its colours dulled, no longer lush.

    I hear them calling out my name
    but I must paint just one more frame,
    dripping down across the sheet,
    I let the colour stain my feet.

    One with art and art has won,
    I'm done, dear god, at last I'm done.
    I cannot take the pain much more,
    the voice who screams, my mind so sore.

    So here I am, the gallant knight,
    who has long since lost his final fight.
    Here I am, my mind a flood,
    painting pretty pictures with blood.

  • Mariam De Haan (9/24/2012 9:36:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    Hey all,
    Tell me what you think of my poem. Please also check out the other ones that I have on my page.

    Confined living

    Words carefully said
    Boundaries slowly laid
    Passions made dead
    Friendships made instead

    We could sleep under stars
    In a country full of scars
    That you dream of
    Like a lover after divorce

    We could lose ourselves in the moment
    Let go of this foolish lent
    Succumb to desire
    Turn ashes into fire

    We could forget the work
    Forget the boredom and the sulk
    Pour it all down the drain
    Go dance in the rain

    We could fly free
    Yes, you and me
    Just seize the day
    Throw all else away

    But we don't do we?
    The safety bars are too strong
    And I don't want it to go wrong
    So we don't, at least not me

    Thank you

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    • Makayla Johnson (9/27/2012 12:03:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

      Lovely poem. I quite like the idea. And don't we all just want to fly free?Too bad the binds of safety and society tie down our wings. Well done, though (and this is probably just me) you might want ... more

  • Lamis Fahal . (9/23/2012 11:16:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Please leave your comments, and hope you will enjoy it,

    All she ever wanted is to be wanted

    He hugged her and kissed her
    And you just looked and stared
    I saw that you saw her
    And didnt show me that you even cared
    You didn't say goodbye
    Or a kiss or good luck
    Didn't look in my eyes
    Didn't you feel there is something I miss
    Don't you think that it's tough for that 12 year old
    To understand your twisted love
    And stand the cold
    All that she wanted
    Is to feel your warmth
    And not feel haunted
    By that harshness of yours
    She wanted to be loved
    And see it in your eyes
    She wanted to be hugged
    But you left her
    With a feeling that never dies
    When all that she wanted
    Is really to be wanted....

    If you liked it you may enjoy my new poems, so feel free to read them please

  • Indranil Bhaduri (9/18/2012 12:05:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Respected Members,
    Cordially invite all of you to kindly read some of my humble contributions here and put your valuable comments.
    Warm regards, Indranil

  • Briana Renn (9/17/2012 7:55:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Hey, I'm Briana and i just turned 15. I would really apreciate it if you read my poem and gave me your opinion. Thanks, have a great day!

  • Cierrah Smiles (9/15/2012 1:12:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    hey people can everyone please read my poems

  • Lamis Fahal . (9/5/2012 2:00:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies Stage

    Hey can u plz give ur opinion on my poem bcz I want to improve my writings.. So if u have any comments I would love to read them and u can check some more

    He made her happy
    He made her fly
    But she turned him down
    So will he ever try
    She was so scared
    He will break her heart
    Not to do that he sweared
    But still she push them apart
    She was too shy
    To edmitt to her self
    He wondered why
    He thinks she doesn't love him
    But he is all that's on her mind
    all night and all day
    Their conversations she rewind
    But still deny what her heart say
    She is afraid
    Her heart will be broken
    And no one will come to her aid
    And to the harsh reality she will be woken
    She won't let go of her shell
    Not matter how. Hard he tries to break through
    So will she allow her self in to his love well
    Or will he move on without the love he never knew
    Will let her go
    Like many others and lose hope
    Or will he fight to know
    The deep love that he will cherish and protect..

    Please leave your comments :) :) ;)

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  • Jean Triumfante (9/5/2012 7:47:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Hi to you all. i am new member. :)

  • Shivani Pillai (9/4/2012 11:10:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Hi! I am Shivani pillai I am just a begginner in poem writing . So I don't know how good my poems are. I would be very glad if you would read my poems and write comments on it. PLS. do this as I am desperate to know what the world thinks of my poetry.

    Shivani Pillai

  • Rishab Parakh (8/27/2012 8:16:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Hey! i'm new here so please help me promote my poems.... it would be very delighted if u help me...

    Thank you!

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