Poetics and Poetry Discussion
(6/25/2013 7:26:00 PM)
I enjoyed reading this, Adam. Ambitious and courageous poem. Not less so for being put on the forum. Best wishes.
(6/25/2013 2:36:00 AM)
Well, Adam, I'm sure you don't want to hear this, but this isn't a very good poem. It's larded with worn abstractions, awkward rhymes, imprecise diction (encumber my tears) , and, perhaps worst of all, a melodramatic hammy theme. You need to STOP writing poems and START reading good contemporary poets. I'll send you a list if you'd like, not to be imitated but to give you a sense of direction, possibility, and inspiration.
..... W@king Up.....
(6/25/2013 1:43:00 AM)
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This poem has many different elements to it which make it a pleasure to read :) there's the nice, easy and intriguing beginning that you have... Yes, the beginning is an important part of a poem. Then there is the free form approach, and the brilliant use of words of which you write :) keep writing, I'm sure you have many more things to offer!