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Vicki Cherney United States (5/12/2013 3:16:00 AM)

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Hi, Abu-

I would say the best thing you could do for your poetry, if you want to write in English, is to continue to study the language. It's great that you already write as well as you do!
As to your poem here - I think you can delete the word " art" from the second line. And why was your mind " reluctant" ? Its seems when you sat down that your mind was jumping with ideas that you were eager to get out (through the " pipe of poetry" - I like that line!) - but that for some reason you weren't able to. Also, I'm confused by the word " prospect" - do you mean idea?

What does your pipe of poetry look like? A corncob pipe? A hookah? I'm curious!

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  • Abdu Musa (5/13/2013 1:36:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Dear Vicki Cherney,

    First of all, I would like to say thank you for your comment.

    As English is my second language, it is not as such easy to write in it well. Thus, your comment is true and valuable. I will continue to learn English.

    However, I didn't understand why I delete the word art. It would be nice if you gave me a reason why I do so.

    By 'prospect' I mean 'chance' or 'hope'. Is it inappropriate to use it in this sense?Let me know, in case I made a mistake.

    My pipe is imaginary. Just imagine it!

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