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  • Michael Shepherd (8/16/2005 4:13:00 AM) Post reply | Read 2 replies Stage

    Hunter-gatherers, backbiters, sinful and damned charitably included: two small matters.
    Do you ever read the supposedly poetry-related headlines on the home Page - like Nikki Giovanni's sister laid to rest (!) ... but sometimes they're really of interest. Usually they add a sign-up. But the current Kentucky item (third from bottom today) wants your sign-up first. This is tiresome - they just lead to more spam offers from 'associates'. I suggest we complain to PH when deprived of these riveting items by commercial stupidity...

    Second, has anyone ever contributed to the Academy's poets.org website for offerings? Naturally I'm not eligible even if, but I wondered if it contains any quality work.

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  • Angela Hansard (8/15/2005 10:09:00 PM) Post reply | Read 6 replies Stage

    To all of you who are making fun of Bob Gotti, just remember that you are making fun of Our Lord and Savior Jesus Christ.Because this is who Bob is writing about. May the Lord have mercy on your souls.If you all do not turn your life around your souls are bound for Hell. Bob is doing his part in getting the message out there to the non believers and trying to turn them around and see the light of Jesus. Frankly there needs to be more poets like Bob.Soleave him alone. Go back to backbitting each other like you usually do.

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    • Lamont Palmer (8/17/2005 11:06:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      Better late than never. Peter got it late too, but Jesus didnt hold it against him. I came back to say I support this statement. Thanks for this Angie.

    • Matthew Pearson (8/16/2005 10:16:00 AM) Post reply | Read 2 replies Stage

      Addendum. It is only people's fascination with me that drew them back here. Mr. Hound, some the paraphrased cliches were from 'Casablanca' you dumbski. Not high art, but well-known popular culture. Ms ... more

    • Rev. Dr. A. Jacob Hassler (8/16/2005 10:13:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      Angela, did you just say that Bob Gotti is Jesus Christ?

    • Herbert Nehrlich1 (8/15/2005 10:22:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      Angel, it was predictable that you would ... more


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  • Rev. Dr. A. Jacob Hassler (8/15/2005 7:02:00 AM) Post reply | Read 6 replies Stage

    well, hello fellow PoemHunters! i'd come out of my weekend coma to find an Inbox inundated with requests for another Exquisite Corpse. i'm all up for coordinating and organizing it. i guess the only thing to decide is our approach! if you want to participate, please dropp me a line. i'll start putting together a line-up.

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  • Ann Spencer (8/15/2005 6:09:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    Michael, re. 'Fantasia For Francis'. Thanks but you are the reader. What I meant is not at issue, rather it's what it meant to you that matters. So, if you don't mind, I would rather you did launch into a spiel about why it's 'unsuccessful'.

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  • Michael Shepherd (8/15/2005 5:47:00 AM) Post reply | Read 2 replies Stage

    Maty, your spirited defence and justification somehow reminded me of Sinatra singing 'I did it my way'... but I think Poetry Snob - although perhaps he or she lacks Jefferson's exquisite tact - does have a point. I'd say your basic error if error it was, was in choosing a metaphoric or allegorical framework for some powerful and extended thought on Justice; so that 'straight' comment overloaded with its enthusiasm the framework. I believe that you could write a very powerful poem on Justice without the metaphorical basis, which would carry the reader better. Extended metaphor has to be kept very tightly and succinctly within itself to be effective, I would suggest. If I added 'too clever by half' as a common comment, it would be in relation to the reader's reception rather than an ad hominem jibe, which as you know we deplore in this site of opinionated poetry snobs... and I'll forgive you on grounds of assumed juvenility, of spelling my name wrong a few times. Actually, the wheel is a more powerful symbol than the wagon in some contexts such as this, since it evokes movement rather than being carried. I think it could stay in some places; 'wagon' gets into the 'machinery of state' area.
    As evidently as scorpion among scorpions, you're welcome to this cosy nest of vipers...you could take a swipe at some of our poems ho ho. I'm AJS would agree. Just don't start with his...

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    • Maty Grosman (8/15/2005 9:58:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

      Thank you, Michael, for your replay. I must admit that your remark is very interesting; I'll have to give it some thought. The biggest problem I faced was the fact that after I identified the metap ... more

    • Herbert Nehrlich1 (8/15/2005 6:13:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      I think the only thing that could save this poem is the establishment (horror) of a smoothly flowing rhyme, something that any framework will easily carry. Obviously, it must be done by the Rhyme Po ... more

  • Allan James Saywell (8/15/2005 3:02:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    to maty well said you certainly told that theatre actor poetry snob that your not just a pretty face i dont no wether he will understand you though
    you appear to have his measure if he said something nasty he likes you

  • Maty Grosman (8/15/2005 2:41:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    RE: Poetry Snob

    I appreciate your attempt to be straightforward. Yet, for the time being, it is only an attempt...I thank you for introducing me to a poet, whose works I will definitely intend to explore. And I also except with a bow your remark about my spelling; that is uncalled for! I will be more careful in the future.

    As for the rest of it, I urge you to stand behind your arguments explicitly; more then just generalized adjectives such as 'ungraceful' or 'murky'.
    When you state that: 'the whole metaphorical structure does little more than over-complicate a simple idea', you must mean that you understand both the idea and the metaphorical structure. In that case, I would ask you to state both. Yet, I believe that if you do understand the idea, you wouldn't claim it to be as simple as that.

    It might not be a great piece of poetry in terms of the 'basics' you have mentioned, and of which I am (explicitly) mostly ignorant. For I am lacking the proper schoolings. Yet, I do rise to defend this poem because It is true to it's substance, of which I heavily contemplated every part.

    Technically, I was concerned with exploring the field of metaphors (which you've mentioned above) , while communicating the historical background and philosophical ideas. (The later being actually rather complicated, and thus presenting a difficulty and being responsible for the poem’s length) . In regarding the presentation, I have deliberately chosen a relatively light and obvious pace of rhyming, what I believed would help solve the problem of length by making the poem flow. (Although I did alter and break the rhyme where I wanted to emphasize) .
    The style I chose to use was also light, with which I tried (along with the chosen metaphors) to suggest the pace of telling a tale, or a legend. The tone of speech and choice of words varied between objects and subjects within the context;
    Shepherd- in a childish, almost ridicule way,
    The driver- with a note of contempt and mischief,
    The horse- with a note of pride, yet always with a sense of the flaw...
    * I just want to note that the whole poem is presented in a childish tone of a tale to make my view of the situation that I'm writing about clear, and also, because I feel that sometimes presenting a horrible thing in a light way creates the strongest imprint.

    I do not want to analyze the whole poem here for I'm sure that people in this forum have other interests on their mind(I would gladly discuss it elsewhere if someone is interested) , but it is only to show you that every part of this poem was contemplated both in substance and presentation. You may disagree with me in regard to my method of presentation, in which field you might possess much further knowledge then I do...(Although I do believe that this poem is a whole and that the presentation suites the substance) . Yet you cannot say that this poem is garbage, for although I'm quite new to the field of poetry, I'm not new to the field of art; I know to differ commercial from artistical; or a 'heap of rubbish' from value.

    I will gladly accept ideas and criticism, but as I said, not unless you support it explicitly. Otherwise your ideas are of no value to me.

    I would like to add only one last thing, which, otherwise I would believe to be self evident: If I thought my writings to be perfect, I wouldn't ask people to review them; I wanted people to review them IN ORDER to see how well and how clear did I manage to communicate them.

    Sincerely,
    Maty.

  • Max Reif (8/14/2005 3:18:00 PM) Post reply | Read 4 replies Stage

    Well, I felt I'd done one of my best pieces of writing ever this morning with 'Berlin, November,1989'. Four hours later, no comments, one vote-2.0.
    Don't we KNOW, inside, when we've done great work? I do'nt get that it so often isn't supported.

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    • Richard George (8/15/2005 12:55:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      It goes on happening to me. Bear in mind what I said: one vote isn't a critical quorum. A hundred - perhaps.

    • Herbert Nehrlich1 (8/14/2005 10:16:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      Just a short mention that the poem Berlin, November,1989 deserves to be read by everyone even those who were not in the midst of it. If the facts don't impress you the ambience will. H

    • Max Reif (8/14/2005 3:18:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

      ps: Of course, there are hundreds of poets here, each feeling he/she is the best.


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  • Michael Shepherd (8/14/2005 3:06:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Rather than launch into a spiel about why it's 'unsuccessful' by my reading, a question: is this meant to be a celebration of St Francis? a wry account of the failure to do so? or a satire on the TV industry? or...?

  • Ann Spencer (8/14/2005 2:23:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    Is this Forum where we come for criticism? If it is please can somebody comment on my poem 'Fantasia For Francis'?

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    • Max Reif (8/14/2005 3:30:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      Dear Ann, I read your poem twice. The second time I felt I was starting to get my bearings. I think it IS a satire on Disney & co's need to romantacize everything. St. Francis' life is perhaps one o ... more

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