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  • Rookie Declan McHenry (11/28/2005 10:51:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies
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    Hi people. With a deep breath, I'm putting one of my pieces up for specific criticism by the noble company of this forum. I would welcome any comments on 'Shouldn’t it be the Greek Horse Anyway? '

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    • Rookie Max Reif (11/29/2005 10:53:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

      Dear Declan, I saw there are a couple of sensitive comments by Andrew and PoHound under the poem. Myself, I dunno if that's a good one to ask for general (from Americans et al) comment on, because ... more

    • Rookie Lori Boulard (11/29/2005 9:25:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

      You're a brave man, Declan. I for one will take a gander tonight.

  • Rookie allan james saywell (11/28/2005 7:57:00 PM) Post reply | Read 3 replies

    all quiet on the Western front the girls must all be in bed big day yesterday
    they must be exhausted French women seem so much stronger then other women
    it must be the water they drink

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  • Rookie - 7 Points Max Reif (11/28/2005 4:51:00 PM) Post reply | Read 5 replies

    I've heard rumors that I'm back, and came to check them out.
    Poets may appreciate hearing that I've just been to the doctor's,
    where I was diagnosed as having an ear INFECTION.
    And on the way back,
    there was a police car lurking
    around the corner from the stop sign
    on the deserted corner down our hill,
    and I was cited for a traffic INFRACTION.

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  • Rookie Herbert Nehrlich1 (11/28/2005 4:24:00 PM) Post reply | Read 3 replies

    For those few with time on their hands and talent in their heads if you would take a minute and have a look at my poem Saturday Mornings and tell me whether it is just a wallowing in reminiscence or actually has some merit.
    Thanks and think PEACE
    Best wishes

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    • Rookie Richard George (11/30/2005 5:49:00 AM) Post reply

      I like it very much - I think it's your best poem yet.

    • Rookie Declan McHenry (11/28/2005 10:36:00 PM) Post reply

      It's emotive (which surely is merit enough) and a smooth read. I liked it.

    • Rookie Joy Vanderhelm (11/28/2005 4:33:00 PM) Post reply

      I beleive all poetry has merit, though not all may have talent. You, however, have both. I left my comment with your poem.

  • Rookie Chris Masters (11/28/2005 2:11:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    whats wright talking about. I'm so bad at this! ! ! !

    A Blessing

    Just off the highway to Rochester, Minnesota,
    Twilight bounds softly forth on the grass.
    And the eyes of those two Indian ponies
    Darken with kindness.
    They have come gladly out of the willows
    To welcome my friend and me.
    We step over the barbed wire into the pasture
    Where they have been grazing all day, alone.
    They ripple tensely, they can hardly contain their happiness
    That we have come.
    They bow shyly as wet swans. They love each other.
    There is no loneliness like theirs.
    At home once more, they begin munching the young tufts of spring in the darkness.
    I would like to hold the slenderer one in my arms,
    For she has walked over to me
    And nuzzled my left hand.
    She is black and white,
    Her mane falls wild on her forehead,
    And the light breeze moves me to caress her long ear
    That is delicate as the skin over a girl's wrist.
    Suddenly I realize
    That if I stepped out of my body I would break
    Into blossom.

    James Wright

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    • Rookie Richard George (11/29/2005 5:19:00 AM) Post reply

      This is so simple (IMHO) - it's about the sense of spiritual exaltation in communing with another species, beautiful, innocent and wild.

    • Rookie Joy Vanderhelm (11/28/2005 4:22:00 PM) Post reply

      J.C. is right, Chris. If you just break it into lines, and then figure out the meaning of each line the poem will begin to take a different shape in your mind. And, don't worry most poetry is open to ... more

  • Rookie Chris Masters (11/28/2005 1:54:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    I need to figure out what the these poems are about.
    kitchenette building - gwendolyn brooks
    A Blessing - james wright
    The Night House - billy collins
    Summer Night - joy harjo
    I'm trying to figure out the Style, symbols, and theme of the poems.
    If anyone who has any comments I wouldbe forever greatful.
    Thanks Chris M

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    • Rookie Poetry Hound (11/28/2005 2:09:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

      Chris, why don't you explain what YOU think they mean first? Otherwise, it looks like you're asking others to do your homework for you. I don't know that you have homework at age 25, but who knows.

  • Rookie allan james saywell (11/28/2005 1:35:00 PM) Post reply

    i'm giving serious thought to reposting all my poems because i think you
    misunderstood my first post in the second posting's i want to be more violent
    to catch up with the modern world, last night i watched a programme concerning
    the French revolution and a pack of women called the 'fish ladies of the french revolution' could be we have a few decendants of those women running around poem hunter masquading as poets

  • Rookie Joseph Daly (11/28/2005 1:10:00 PM) Post reply | Read 3 replies

    Any more tributes to George Best out there? I only know of two and one of them's mine. Hey, in case you folk in the USA are wondering who I'm talking about, just think Joe de Maggio or Babe Ruth.

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    • Rookie Richard George (11/29/2005 5:22:00 AM) Post reply

      My mother was talking to me while I was watching one of the tributes to Best on Saturday. I wasn't listening to her - I wasn't trying to be rude. I was hypnotised by his ball-skill like a rabbit by a ... more

    • Rookie Declan McHenry (11/28/2005 3:56:00 PM) Post reply

      The thought very briefly crossed my mind but was dropped on two counts. First, there aren't that many words that rhyme with 'pickled' and, second, I'd already used the overused 'poetry in motion' in a ... more

    • Rookie Allan James Saywell (11/28/2005 1:23:00 PM) Post reply

      didn't he have a drinking problem that stuffed his life and ruined everyone around him, sporting gods die quickly

  • Rookie Mary Nagy (11/28/2005 6:51:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    Well.......if I may mention actual poetry and something productive today! Has anyone heard whether the book arrived to Lori and what her thoughts were? When it should be ready for us to order? I hope before christmas. Sincerely, Mary

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    • Rookie Lori Boulard (11/28/2005 11:50:00 AM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

      Hi Mary. I run to the mailbox everyday, and just like in my poem 'Life Outside the Box' I am disappointed, so far. Maybe today will be the lucky day...I don't expect big problems, so hopefully it wi ... more

  • Rookie Michael Philips (11/28/2005 6:21:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    On the subject of poetry, I wonder if people would mind reading and critiquing/commenting on a poem I just posted called 'No Hands Restaurant, Hanoi.' It's a work in progress and I have already received some excellent advice from Jefferson Carter. Thanks very much in advance (It's kind of long - sorry) .

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    • Rookie Michael Shepherd (11/28/2005 7:06:00 AM) Post reply

      Was Jane Fonda staying there at the same time? I hope so, if you're going to continue the story... Hey, read it, everybody! It's serious fun!

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