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Workshop for poetry written in traditional forms.
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jas Cagz jas Cagz Male, 49, United Kingdom (4/10/2012 12:38:00 PM)

[DARLING] I want to be with you when you walk the dog,

Check out rainbow's on a broken log,

I'm sad when you say I'm walking along the beach,

I hold out my hand but your out of reach,

When I hear your voice I close my eye's,

Pretend I'm there and shout surprize,

I want to smell you everyday,

Love and kiss you in everyway,

I'd hold you close and yes you know,

I'd never ever let you go.

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  • Robert Winthrop (5/6/2012 12:08:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Nice poem. However, check spelling " you're out of reach, " every way-two words, surprise with an s, hold you close and, yes, you know.

  • Ralph The Elf (4/22/2012 3:07:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    if this is real then let her know
    you only lose if you don't show
    your love and care and for the maiden
    that makes you feel like a baby

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