Rhythm and Rhyme Workshop
(7/25/2005 4:47:00 PM)
I think you should write out - 'did not' instead of 'didn't'. Then it reads well.
I like the poem. It is the first time I have visited the workshop.
Best wishes, Philippa Lane
(7/12/2005 1:35:00 PM)
Just a suggestion, how about: Embankments left those rivers fast,
Far from a love that did not last.
Just my opinion, good luck!
(7/11/2005 7:41:00 PM)
I think that 'From love that didnt last' is perfect.
Its more interesting.
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