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Steve Hagerman Male, 63, United States (3/21/2009 12:19:00 AM)

The Nor'easter

'The wind is up by nor'east boys;
She'll be a blow tonight.'
For what was eight bell rippled ease
Will come a roarin' fright.
The merc' was down to fourteen bars
and droppin' like a stone.
If we can't make East Marble Cove,
We'll meet with Davey Jones.

The captain called all hands to task
And barked the dogwatch choir;
'Unfurl that mizzen full me lads
and set the headsails fore.'
The cook began to bellyache.
The shipboy's face turned white.
'Secure the main sheet's bitter end,
then throw them yards a bight.'

Gray headland cliffs, now needle thin,
Had just come into view.
And three hours hence, safe harbor cove.
We only had but two.
As bound began to grow great swells,
Squalls marched across the sky.
The captain quipped, 'She's close I fear',
Then let a long, low sigh.

The wind among the rigging howled,
Our ship heeled hard to lee.
Teak decking creaked, as mastheads swayed
And gunnels filled with sea.
White-knuckled men in wide-eyed stare
began to cry and pray.
All I could think was; what a ride!
Thrill AND two bits a day?

SDH

No bold? No italics? No font size? This sucks!

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  • Josie Whitehead (3/27/2009 8:43:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Is your writing quite dull? Does it not get reviews?
    Has your brain gone to sleep, and what of your muse?
    I’ve read some good tips and I tend to agree,
    Now here’s what I read. Do come follow me.

    Grab the attention of readers with headings that strike -
    Study your readers and know what they like.
    Introduce what you’re saying in that very first line
    And get them enthralled with an opening that shines.

    Then group thoughts together in a logical form,
    Adding humour and colour to words that inform.
    Don’t wander around with what you must say
    For your readers have more things to do with his day

    Don’t smother the reader with your point of view
    For they’ll also have thoughts on the subject, like you.
    Assume that your readers have some common sense –
    Well most readers have but a few may be dense!

    If you are an expert, don’t blind them with science.
    Don’t show disagreement or too much compliance.
    Don’t put over your facts in a cold icy way,
    Add a sprinkling of humour to that which you say.

    Some ingredients for poetry are the same as for prose,
    But there’s surely a difference. Make sure that it shows.
    So, what other advice would you like to suggest
    To change dull listless writing into some of the best?

  • Chuck Audette (3/25/2009 11:48:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Like this very much, Mr. Hagerman. Been wanting to do a shipwreck poem myself, you've caught the full flavor of it here...

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