Rhythm and Rhyme Workshop


Workshop for poetry written in traditional forms.
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  • Veteran Poet - 1,246 Points Juwon Daniel (2/23/2015 2:29:00 PM) Post reply
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    Poetry is a projection across silence of
    cadences arranged to break that silence
    with definite intentions of echoes,
    syllables, wave lengths.
    The pairs of unstressed syllables
    throughout this poem give a rapid
    movement to the lines which imitates the
    poem's action.
    " Stopping by the wood on a snowy evening"

  • Silver Star - 7,657 Points Eric Ericson (1/13/2015 5:33:00 AM) Post reply

    Reply to Jefferson Carter

    because I cannot seem to get this forum to work properly

    I find form something to be changed If I don't like it. I have written several where the first line has suggested a form, but the body needed something else.
    They ended up being completely different from where they started.

    Yes I believe in editing, but at my wife's request I keep earlier drafts to make sure that I haven't lost anything in the process.

    I agree that I can spit out a lot of verbiage quickly and " because I wrote it" does not make it good.

    Poetry is art. This is true.

    But the poet must also be a craftsman. Form or lack there of is a tool in his chest to be used or discarded at his whim. There is no " strait-jacket" here.

  • Silver Star - 7,657 Points Eric Ericson (1/11/2015 7:19:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    it is not enough to rhyme the words upon the written page
    and rhythm flowing gently on will only set the stage
    you must tear back the coverings however thick they be
    and open up your beating heart for all the world to see
    you deride an older form that's no longer the rage
    and say that those who use it now are trapped with in a cage.
    I think you lack the discipline to practice, that's the key
    and you hide your feelings with this thing called mockery

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    • Silver Star - 7,657 Points Jefferson Carter (1/11/2015 10:58:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

      Eric, if this an " answer" to my poem, it exhibits all the faults and dangers of rhyming poetry—filler (written page, however thick they be) , stumbling meter (that's no longer the rage) , a ... more

  • Freshman - 644 Points Jefferson Carter (1/10/2015 3:32:00 PM) Post reply

    A free-verse poem written about (and against) those who think rhyme is necessary for good poetry.



    NEO-FORMALISM



    The water’s thick with sturgeon,
    a fish that needs, as the song says,

    no urgin’. The virgin sturgeon
    is a mighty fine fish. The virgin sturgeon

    makes a mighty fine dish. Feel
    your soma absorb those rhymes,

    that primal, childlike joy? You don’t?
    Guards! Confiscate all writing materials!

    Weld the doors shut! We don’t know
    much, but we know what we like.

  • Rookie - 0 Points Amit Madhvani (11/16/2014 8:37:00 AM) Post reply

    nice

  • Freshman - 547 Points Nehemiah Theophylus Haokip (10/5/2014 6:42:00 AM) Post reply

    O Rain the blessings of all lives,
    O Air the blessings of all Breath,
    O Sun the blessings of all Radiation,
    O Stars the blessings of all the darkness,
    O Mountain the blessings of all Rivers,
    O Ocean the blessings of all Fish,
    O Universe the blessings of all living and non living,
    O God the creator of all and all above.

  • Freshman - 547 Points Nehemiah Theophylus Haokip (10/1/2014 3:46:00 AM) Post reply

    THE KUKI ORIGINAL PHILOSOPHICAL POETRY

    When Chamtatpa sharp his knife on a rock,
    The Prawn pressing his bottom,
    Chamtatpa had got angry and cut off the Bamboo branch,
    The cut off Bamboo branch falls and hit the head of Jungle Cock,
    When the Jungle cock flew and hit over the hive of Bee,
    The Bee flew and sting over the the Hog's eye,
    The Hog run and cut all the tree of Banana,
    The Bats flew from the leaves of the tree of Banana and flew inside the ear of an Elephant,
    And the Elephant run and destroyed the house of an Widow

    Case
    The Widow file case against the Elephant and the Elephant file case against the Bats and the Bats file case against the Hog and the Hog file case against the Bee and the Bee file case against the jungle cock and the jungle file case against the Bamboo branch and the Bamboo branch file case against the Chamtatpa and the Chamtatpa file case against the Prawn and the said I am really so sorry burn me in the fire so that my colour will become changing into brown and than put me again in the water from there onward the Prawn always back side not front side.

    The translation
    1.Chamtatpa means student
    2. Sharp the knife means Education
    3. Prawn means Ignorance or uneducated
    4. Bamboo means Class steps
    5. Jungle cock means Intelligent
    6. Hive of bee means literature
    7. The Hog means means the Teacher
    8. The Banana tree means School
    9. The Bat means knowledge
    10.An elephant means Brilliant,
    10. The Widow house destroy means ignorance destroy
    11. Filing case means knowledge and wisdom.
    This poem was one of the most famous poetry of the Kuki since 12 century AD

  • Rookie - 6 Points Amber Bartle (9/21/2014 5:26:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    I always have had trouble with incorporating meter and stressed/unstressed syllables. Can someone explain to me the right way to use meter? Thanks

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    • Rookie - 6 Points Eric Ericson (11/22/2014 6:28:00 AM) Post reply

      meter is about flow. it is like dance music. read aloud Frost and Shakespeare, Keats and Poe. Read A.A. Milne. read the words to an Irish folk tune and then listen to it sung. (" The rocky ... more

    • Rookie - 6 Points John Masaitis (9/26/2014 4:00:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

      Hi Amber well I by no means am an expert but I have been learning a lot lately when it comes to poetry. You want to try to have the same syllable count in each line if you are writing say a monotetra ... more

  • Gold Star - 16,067 Points Mohammad Skati (9/8/2014 7:06:00 AM) Post reply

    Rhymes and rhythms differ from a certain language to another language. If we compare those in the Arabic poetry to those in English poetry, then we will find those in Arabic poetry are too many if they're compared to those in English and so on...

  • Rookie - 359 Points Zoila T. Flores (9/5/2014 5:48:00 PM) Post reply

    By the Autumn... all that?Wow!

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