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Anthony Marriner Male, 53, United Kingdom (9/9/2006 3:35:00 AM)

Mental anguish of many hues is responsible for so much creativity. I think being able to capture the anguish and own it can help one live with it and also help loved ones understand.

'Cloud Cover' is an attempt to do this for me.

I don’t see myself in this. Waiting for the cloud to part and my illumination to begin.
When I’m warm I grasp it, mania ensues. The need for clarification overwhelms me.
I overstep the mark and your recoil begins, reciting Oppenheimer.
Caught in the brightness, all I can do is wait for the clouds to converge.
You walk away.
Wanting to feel.
Wanting to hope.
Wanting to love.
Cloud cover.

Briefest of glimpses. You see me in there.
Promethean intensity revealing what is alive, but that which can’t persist.
A love shaped by contrast, by shade: eclipsed.
Within my penumbra all is bleak.
I want to emerge and unfurl-to radiate
You remain.
Helping me feel.
Helping me hope.
Helping me love.
Cloud cover.

Red and Black are my world’s only colours.
Falsehoods and deceptions, contradictions overshadow what emerges inside me.
I am at home in Diodati.
Corrosion can be reversed but its remnants still contaminate.
Acceptance of the haze is the beginning of purity.
You cleanse.
I feel.
I hope.
I love.
Cloud revealed.

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  • Rookie Nicole Miller (10/3/2006 6:50:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply
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    I love & feel I relate with what you've written. I don't usually post replies to things and not sure what I should say, but I thought your poem was beautiful.

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    • Rookie Anthony Marriner (10/16/2006 10:47:00 AM) Post reply

      Nicole Thank you very much, I really appreciate your kind words. I have just started trying to write poetry and the only things I can refer to seem to be my own experiences about things. Thanks again ... more

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