(9/19/2013 6:48:00 PM)
that i think is a nice poetry of communication. i think it is about a struggle to accept and recognize one self and that is cool.more grace,
(9/10/2013 7:29:00 AM)
Not all poems have to be indirect to be good. They just depend on your writing style, any one of which is unique among all writing styles. There is no bad poetry.
I like your poem, by the way! Very good and abstract already! I don't see what you're worrying about.