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Badboy Vibes Male, 38, United Kingdom (8/3/2013 11:03:00 AM)

I post here for feedback regarding age suitibility for my poem...Not for attention seeking...I love to write poems/rhymes...but realise that there is no money to be made in it...unless you can pull in the story books for kids???? Rhymes for kids cant be that difficult to do, can they?...I have tried...I dont think I have succeded very well as the point in the story is maybe too much for the age group that such a story/poem is for?

Basicly...what age group do you think would enjoy this poem?

Never Ever Keep A Whale In Your Pond

Did you ever hear of the tale,
about the Man...who kept in a small pond...a rather huge Whale.

(in my opinion, he should have gone to jail)

In the pond...the Whale would miserably sit,
whilst the Man`s friends...all stared and pocked at it.

Then one night...the rains did heavily drop,
and from the pond...the Whale did hop.

(not much of a hop, more of a twist and a belly flop)

And still the rains...did not cease to stop.

Flooding the land and lifting the house,
up a tree...ran a door mouse.

Then the house started to move and float,
being nudged by the Whale...it was now moving like a speed boat.

To the Ocean...they set sail,
the house being pushed...by the huge Whale.


Now the man lives...all out at sea,

with the Whales charging Dolphins...a small fee,

to see The Monkey...that belongs...back in a tree.

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