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  • Miranda S (10/24/2005 8:37:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    I just joined the site yesterday, and I would like someone to review at least one of my poems. Thanks!

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    • Sofiul Azam (1/1/2006 10:01:00 AM) Post reply

      I hope we will share our feelings with each other.......about poetry

  • Sandy Poo (10/23/2005 3:58:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    Hey I wrote this imagery poem for an English assignment and it's one of the first poems I ever wrote. Feedback please :)

    -TRANQUIL DAY-

    Just another tranquil day
    Flowers blooming early in May
    Lying on my back watching the clouds
    Makes me just want to sigh aloud

    Oh cotton clouds of fleece
    Couldn’t be finer in Greece
    The gentle breeze blowing through my hair
    Makes my troubles dissolve in the air

    The narrow stream flowing by
    As if already heading for July
    And tiny birds are drinking out of this stream
    And I wonder if this isn’t a heavenly dream

    Such a picturesque day
    My face glowing in the sun’s rays
    If everyday could be so serene
    Then it would be heaven unseen

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    • Alefya Najmi (11/13/2005 3:18:00 PM) Post reply

      hey.. i think its a pretty good attempt for the english assignment.

  • Etienne Utube (10/16/2005 6:41:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    anyone who posts a poem in another language should also add the english version. I might be of interest to some who love to learn new languages... :)

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    • David Mitchell (11/3/2005 8:25:00 AM) Post reply

      This message inspired me to attempt a poem in French, with a verse translation into English. I didn't write a straight prose translation though.

  • Aggelos Britzis (10/10/2005 7:25:00 AM) Post reply

    ..i think the poems we can post here must be writen in english language.. eh? not in any other.. eh?

  • N.C Cusack (10/10/2005 5:10:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    Hey guys, I'm quite new to this site. I'm more of a song writer than anything so if you ever get the chance to read my stuff think of them as songs.
    I'd also appreciate any comment or such because I need to know if my songs are alright and where I can improve on them.

    So far I've had good comments from friends.

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  • D.m. Barber (10/6/2005 2:20:00 AM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    hello everyone,
    i am a new member as of today and just want to know what people think are the best techniques and tips they have aqquired over time, to me i beleive the truth, current issues and writing metophorical poems are all very interesting ways to write. if there are any other tips floating around i would bve gratefull to receive them thank-you.

    check out my listed poems if you would like to try to get to know me better.

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    • Poetry Hound (10/9/2005 8:59:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

      I disagree with Tony. When you're feeling a strong emotion, it's a bad time to write a poem. You can jot some notes down or do a first draft, but then you should wait until the emotion is not as stron ... more

    • Tony Jennett (10/9/2005 4:22:00 AM) Post reply

      Don't write a poem when you get an idea - write one when you get a feeling be it anger sorrow sympathy - whatever. Don't worry about the meter; that will come as you write and you can tidy it up as yo ... more

  • Dean Elzinga (10/1/2005 12:39:00 AM) Post reply

    Hi there. New to PoemHunter. Definitely interested in techniques, and a little feedback.

    You Look Great She Said

    you look great she said
    and she meant that
    I do not look as bad
    as she thought
    by the light in the hall

    it looks good on you
    she said and she meant
    how sad that
    our face has lines
    and our hair falls out

    have you lost weight
    she asked and I thought
    you and I should not be too thin
    for our skin is like paper
    less elastic and more transparent

    -dean

  • Thomas Viruvelil (9/11/2005 11:59:00 PM) Post reply

    I have posted 16 poems on love and on death and despair.would like to have your comments please

  • Tineyjo Langley (9/9/2005 10:51:00 PM) Post reply

    hi i just entered two poems instead and whati felt i had to do please give me feedback on what you think thank you.

  • Elie Abou Chaaya (9/9/2005 6:54:00 PM) Post reply

    Hello people,
    i just need professional opinions for 2 of my poems 'my promise' and 'till we meet again', it's very urgent and important. post your opinions directly to me, or in here. i heard people say that i have a unique style of writing. and i'm asking yours. thank you all in advance.

    Till we meet again
     
     
    It’s hard to say goodbye, and leave everything behind
    But, my dear, I am forced to leave far away and hide
    Away from you, and weep every moment we spent together
    But what can I do, if faith holds us apart from each other?

    I struggled so long, till I forgot the reason behind the pain
    But all I know, is that every time I see you, my heart beats again
    In stormy nights, and shiny days, summer breezes, and winter bites
    I struggled till I couldn’t no more; I surrendered and delivered the fight

    It’s time to say goodbye, I kiss your hand while I am down on my knees
    Knowing that you will never be mine, denying that you belong to me
    The fight is over, the war is lost, and through the ashes, you will find me
    Alone, broken, screaming your name, as my wounds are killing me

    How I always wanted to say to you how much I love you
    How I desired one honest look from your eyes, into the depths of my soul
    But, you never understand what I want, or you knew and never desired me
    You preferred others, made mistakes, and were too blind to see

    What you’ve done to my heart, what you’ve done to my soul and my mind
    It’s time for me to leave, to tear away what’s left from me, and leave you behind
    How life is not fair, how love is ruthless, how feelings get dissolved and fade away
    I will go to bed tonight, and cry you one last time, and tomorrow, I will start a new day

    I will march the gardens of misery, and try to find a rose, all alone like me
    I will give her love, warm, comfort, water, and sun; I will kiss her thorns and bleed
    And none of you will remain, but a name written on my heart with fire
    You shall always be forever my lost love, my lost need, my lost desire...

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