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  • Mary-Elizabeth Conn (4/14/2006 3:27:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Hey everyone! Me again! I've just written a new poem 'Dieting you Out of my System' and I was wondering if you could possibly leave me a comment about it? If you read mine then I'll return the favour! Thanks :)

  • Jeannette Broere (4/14/2006 8:13:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    I really am new here on this site...
    Are there any people outthere who can help me as a dutchie for to learn more english words I can use in my poems? ?
    I like to contact them and give a list with the words I 'need' to know! !
    Please answer me by mail.
    Thanks a lot to all poets that will help me......

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  • Jose Saca (4/13/2006 9:48:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    No one posts here. Meh...

  • Ernest Mayer (4/11/2006 9:25:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    I promise to return the favor to anyone who is willing to check out and give me feedback on my poetry. I don't have many on here, so it'll be easy. Plus, they're short.

  • Nibedita Deb (4/9/2006 11:25:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    If I were a dropp of water:
    - G.Sivaswamy

    I look up and see this sky -
    Sometimes dark and smoetimes bright
    And I really wonder - why;

    Why do people use might and fight;
    All but or one more dropp of water!
    Believe me, this is not a silly matter!

    Daily I see the long twining queues -
    Queues of people on the Municipal taps;
    Different face with different hues.

    But all have the same mission - perhaps
    To take home a few more drops of water.
    And I think - 'what if I were a dropp of water? '

    Umm... If I was a dropp of water,
    I would have fallen from the heavens above
    Falling down and down, happily down;
    No ego of going down!
    Because that is Nature - Free from all.
    It's a pity - I can't be that way!
    If I was a dropp of water -
    While quenching a thirsty man,
    I won't think about
    His caste, creed, colour or race!
    I will flow in my own pace -
    Till I see a smile of his face.

    If I were a dropp of water,
    I would be in harmony
    With my surrounding drops!

    Never getting in the way of another drop.
    Always getting on with each other
    Filling each other's gaps.

    It's really a pity I can't be that way!
    Now that I know that I am not a dropp any ore;

    That wonderful drop,
    Which is colurless
    Yet gives colour to life itself.

    The dropp which doen't know where it lands,
    Be it a desert, Ganges, or Cauvery!
    It just goes on till -
    It returns to his source- theheaven;
    At least I can try to become one!

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    • Mike Finley (4/13/2006 4:05:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      It's a beautioful meditation. And water even in the tap continues to flow. Even when it's stagnant it flows within itslf? It rises via evaopration... it disperses as vapor... it falls as rain... i ... more

  • Nibedita Deb (4/9/2006 11:32:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    Just something I thought I should share...

    Most poems (rather all poems) relating to nature while speaking of waterbodies refer to rivers, seas, waterfalls, rain, lakes, strams, etc.

    I read an interesting poem which was about water falling from municipal taps! !

    Thank you.

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    • Sonny Rainshine (4/9/2006 5:50:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

      Yeah. So much poetry is about 'flow.' Clouds are on the move, rivers are rushing off somewhere, time itself seems to trickle away. Tell us about the poem about water flowing from taps. Was it a goo ... more

  • Nibedita Deb (4/5/2006 8:49:00 AM) Post reply | Read 4 replies Stage

    'A successful poem paints its own pictures, plays its own music, and move with their own flow, meeting in the sea of realization.' - Anonymous

    What other attribute can you associate with a successful poem?

    Nibedita Deb.

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    • Mary-Elizabeth Conn (4/14/2006 2:26:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      I'd probably say something that strikes an emotional chord with the reader. If it makes you cry while writing it then it will make somebody out there cry reading it. Emotion is definately important. A ... more

    • D A Phinney (4/14/2006 2:11:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      A really successful poem makes the reader go, 'Whoa! This must be by one of them famous poets! ' A variation on this would be that the reader can imagine someone actually paying to read this author's ... more

    • Mike Finley (4/7/2006 6:29:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      I don't think poems lend themselves to 'success formulas.' Otherwise, we'd all be writing really good poems, every time out. Anonymous (whose work I cherish) neglected the part about saying somet ... more

    • Sonny Rainshine (4/5/2006 2:09:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      A friend of mine says that a good poem p ... more

  • Nibedita Deb (4/4/2006 10:32:00 PM) Post reply Stage


    As a child I had read John Milton's 'On his blindness' - the poem had eally touched me. But probably I was lacking in something - experience. A week back the doctor told me I would have to use glasses. No not blindness, just a minute power. But today when I find that the little distant objects, which I could earlier see clearly, are now blurred, and wavy, and that I can't see it clear again without a pairof spectacles, I can't explain what I feel. Of course I am not the only the person to have an eye disorder, but i thought i should share this experience:

    Images falter from their orbs
    Circling in my cornea
    The lines are lost
    Jagged ends of dimmest silhoutte
    I see this world thrown into shades
    Or hidden behind thick glasses
    Clarity lost into vague glass paints.

    Nibedita Deb.

  • Azura Cerise (4/4/2006 10:12:00 PM) Post reply Stage


    Thank you for your kind message.
    I will remember what you said.
    You see I am very very lazy and don't feel like typing out my poems!
    No, but for a sweet friend like you, I will.

    And kisses...

  • Nibedita Deb (4/4/2006 10:08:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    * This message is for Azura Cerise.

    Well, ... Azura,
    Everything needn't to be taken seriously. You will always have a way out if you keep yourself aloof from everything that is unnecessary...Unnecessary relationships, unnecessary correspondence and unnecessary talks. Drill this into your mind that we have come to poemhunter for and only for poems. Our focus should be that and just that, and nothing else. Make sure that everything you do here educates you, enriches your faculty of mind.

    You see you are a year older than me, but somehow you are less used to what I should call as 'diversions'.: -) So leave all that and just have fun. Write some good poetry and send it to poemhunters.

    You are a real sweet girl!

    The fullest of my love,
    (And kisses too! for you)

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