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Blossom Mist

Rookie - 0 Points (24 February 1978 / India)

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  • Rookie - 484 Points Richard Beevor (4/25/2014 4:22:00 PM)

    lovely poem, like the story and the sadness of love

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  • Rookie Anne Havell (3/6/2014 5:20:00 AM)

    This poem is heavy in meaning and rich In imagery. I've rated it high though I think it could be improved if you maintained a consistent rhyming scheme throughout then the poem would flow more freely without jarring stops. The lines has a strong internal rhythm and this work well. I hope you do not think I am being unnecessarily critical but in my opinion it would be worth putting in a little extra work as basically you've written a very good poem. Well done.

Unspoken Love

An Unspoken word, an unsolved mystery.
Our love now seems a long unwritten history.
It’s hard to hide and tough to cry, for you know not how much I try.
Tingles run through my spine, reverberating every inch of mine.
How much I yearn for you to be mine.
But it’s a hopeless barren ravine, plagued by the carcass of my love divine.
My lost love now lays buried in a deep grave.
Its for you and only you I crave.
But be sure it will never be up again.

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