Blossom Mist

Rookie - 0 Points (24 February 1978 / India)

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  • Rookie - 341 Points Richard Beevor (4/25/2014 4:22:00 PM)

    lovely poem, like the story and the sadness of love

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  • Rookie - 341 Points Anne Havell (3/6/2014 5:20:00 AM)

    This poem is heavy in meaning and rich In imagery. I've rated it high though I think it could be improved if you maintained a consistent rhyming scheme throughout then the poem would flow more freely without jarring stops. The lines has a strong internal rhythm and this work well. I hope you do not think I am being unnecessarily critical but in my opinion it would be worth putting in a little extra work as basically you've written a very good poem. Well done.

A Mask

Everyday, a mask I put on from dusk till dawn.
I know not if its a habit forced upon.
As I look on, I fail to concur who's reflection it is in the mirror.
They say its me I see, but I remember, I was beautiful like eve.
Now all I see is a mask and me, which I wear n change you see.
I want to be four again, to be able to jump on the lane.
To laugh my wits out n cry out aloud, float on a cloud and lick my porridge
bowl.
To paint with hands and make bubbles dance, race with bikes and chase

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