I see a talent here, although I didn't read one poem that I felt was really finished. I hope you are reading poetry- maybe some publications like American Poetry Review and Poetry. Keep writing...I'm sincere about believing in your talent.
You Are A Gentle Hum
You are of some beautiful artistry; Made of artifical light; a gentle hum When the song is over My love, You are my biggest secret Only I, this paper, and these words know That I love you more and more, every hour Just your knowing glance;